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Published: 2009-07-04 13:25:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 146; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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I'm working on my comic pages. This is for my webcomic [link] . Toning is still something I am improving.Related content
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:/ Y'know... I've never mentioned it before but sometimes the way you write makes the story seem kinda awkward... Like in the panel where the guy with the black hair is holding his head -- instead of saying "What to do they are crazy... wait I know" you might wanna rephrase it to something like... "What do I do?! They're crazy!! ...Wait, I have an idea." Putting "Wait, I have an idea." into a separate bubble for added emphasis.
Just a suggestion, you can ignore it if you want.
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This really helps, I had it all in a notebook but the notebook is MIA thank you for the opinion I did think it sounded weird
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Anytime. If you ever need someone to double check your writing, I'll be glad to beta it for you.
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