Comments: 8
ku-kiwi [2012-05-11 04:33:48 +0000 UTC]
It's definitely interesting. usually not my type of read since I have no idea who the character is, is But it held my attention; not something I could just stop reading in the middle of. The commas in a few place killed me, they might have been better suited with just space or a ';' instead. But I liked it overall; unique!!
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic In reply to ku-kiwi [2012-05-11 04:35:44 +0000 UTC]
Hm, perhaps I do need to cut down on the commas. Perhaps you can point them out to me?
Thank you!
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic In reply to ku-kiwi [2012-05-11 04:43:03 +0000 UTC]
Ah, I see. I totally understand, XD
Thanks for the tip, friend.
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NinjaHaku21 [2012-04-29 05:13:23 +0000 UTC]
I am hooked!!! OAO I got to know what happens next!! fjioewfjwioefj this is a really great story so far! ;A; keep it up!! this Dark Enigma is making me curious to learn more about him. ewe
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