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pendrachken [2016-09-22 02:44:54 +0000 UTC]

For the Photography forum feedback request thread: 

Your composition is at war with itself. On the one hand you have really nice curves in the back pulling the eye up to the head, and truly awesome lines leading from the heart shaped hands, down the arms and finally down the legs. Everything  mentioned perfectly pulls the eye through the frame. Then you have the head, it's super static and shows no motion at all: part of this is because it is centered, and part is because it is both perfectly vertical and horizontal.
    This makes the head look like it is floating there disconnected from the rest of the composition. I am also going to assume that this is still the standard APS-C sized image and not cropped to a 35MM ratio, if cropped the composition MAY be improved if you can get the head up into the corner more and remove some of the top background. 

fav.me/d9gqz4u is a good example from your gallery that has the head nice and flowing through the rest of the bodies composition, with no real purely straight horizontal or vertical line. The composition of the rest of the frame is not so good ( everything is centered and static), but the actual composition of the model herself is spot on. Look at the interaction of the face, neck, shoulders, and neckline of the shirt... you will see that they all flow together into the arms, pulling the eye around the model herself. It also makes the model stand out more from the background since it is "interesting" to the eye, meaning it is more active than the static background. 


Focus issues: The very first thing I notice is that the focus on the face is soft compared to the features and cloth on the arms in front of the face. It is the most noticeable in the eyes, you can see that they are mostly in focus, but not as sharp as they should be. The next thing I notice is that you seem to have realized this and cranked the sharpness up considerably to try and compensate. This has both harshened the texture on all of the exposed skin and accentuated the noise artifacts in the bokeh of the background. 


All together it isn't a BAD photograph, but it could be improved upon. If you had the model tilt her head a small amount so it fits with the flow of the rest of the composition it would fit much better, and if you watch the focus points more carefully you wouldn't have to worry about skin textures as much. 

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LucienWittwer [2016-09-12 18:19:23 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful portrait

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madre-superiora [2016-09-09 18:07:01 +0000 UTC]

I like the "texture" very nice feeling

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cosmicbrat [2016-09-09 04:02:54 +0000 UTC]

In this shot the subject IS the forest.  the forest is the subject..  done so well to blend the two in harmony...
Maybe this model becomes her settings..?   probably an artisan actor..?
Suggest place her near fire, and ice, and mists, and fogs..  Maybe have her "squeezing a rainbow in a fist"..?

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Gibert [2016-09-08 11:58:21 +0000 UTC]

Golden shot, I love it!

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