Jet948 In reply to NightrunnerXM [2018-02-03 01:50:06 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome . BDW , If that won't be a problem , could you check my work here ? docs.google.com/document/d/1lg…
I know it is unfinished but we had all year fucking autumn in my country so it beat me out of the rhythm . Remember , that I will need to give you permission . Sent me an ask for permission or a mail via note .

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Jet948 In reply to he4rt-br34k [2018-01-28 07:25:48 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome . This pic reminds me of my story about prison riot . Do you want to hear it ?

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he4rt-br34k In reply to Jet948 [2018-01-28 08:12:05 +0000 UTC]

sure. 

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Jet948 In reply to he4rt-br34k [2018-01-30 21:12:14 +0000 UTC]

Sorry for so long . It is more than one year of fucking autumn in my country and it is so depressing and annoying 
So this was a memory of Legion - the person we want to find in my story - Shield and Sword . Legion was tasked to supress violent prison riot in juvenile correction colony . After meeting with female warden in safe zone he received a program that was to restore security system and pacify the prisoners . He also was informed that the riot was caused by few people of the staff and they are in bed with the rioters . Those were - a leiutenant guard and some of his men , a security technician who deactivated the security , a nurse , and few others . When finding the technician , he was not hostile to us . On the contrary , he said that he expected us and the riot has a purpose . He handled his own disc and before he was able to speak his mind he was killed by the guards . When they noticed he has his disc , they asked him to handle it . When Legion refused , (as he could smell the rat very easy ) and ordered his hacker to check what are those programs , the guards  immediately opened fire . As it turned out the first program was to reactivate security system and kill prisoners AND US while the second was to deactivate all means of escape from personnel as well as to protect and secure all data . After reaching the security console we find out the shocking truth .The warden and most of the staff were involved in organized crime - slave trading , organ extraction , forced labor in the mines and fields without equipment or protection clothes and more . The prisoners were abused raped , beaten (even young kids ) and killed . Now , how was that possible that no one found this out ? Simple . Warden was bribing inspectors and other persons who came for the check up . As for those who didn't wanted to accept she was killing them as well as every member of the personnel who tried to alert the authorities . In a mass grave nearby aside of prisoners we would found corpses of lawyers , priests , doctors , prisoner rights volunteers , inspectors . After this , Legion orderes his men to rescue prisoners and witnesses and kill every guard and prison staff member that won't surrender or will try anything funny . During the fight we would witness many dantesque scenes - a female prisoner who died escorting the children to safety , victims of epidemic , and also , barely alive , with sides of numerous abuse and rape  little girl who was said to pray , that Legion would come and bring his wrath upon the wardern who also was sending bottles with letters to ask for help .    After providing the corrupted prison staff with blood feast  warder he beats her to a pulp and provided her with cruel and painful death . After securing the prison we could meet with this girl and have a very touching moment . Remember this is just a shortcut , but if it is good I will consider writing the story

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he4rt-br34k In reply to Jet948 [2018-02-01 13:17:48 +0000 UTC]

nice! i think you should start writing it already.  

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Jet948 In reply to NanakoNyan [2018-01-19 18:10:27 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Jet948 In reply to GeoKorf [2017-12-12 11:11:12 +0000 UTC]

Proszę , a tak przy okazji , nie miałbyś nic przeciwko abym pokazał moją pracę do ocenienia ?

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GeoKorf In reply to Jet948 [2017-12-12 22:54:47 +0000 UTC]

yes please

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Jet948 In reply to GeoKorf [2017-12-28 11:06:39 +0000 UTC]

Hi . Sorry that I was silent for so long . I tried to improve my work and finish some important gaps but this year fucking autumn doesn't make my life easier I will sent you both original and mostly improved versions .

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GeoKorf In reply to Jet948 [2018-01-01 15:55:06 +0000 UTC]

You have some approval, restriction

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Jet948 In reply to GeoKorf [2018-01-02 07:34:36 +0000 UTC]

I allowed you to see it  . BDW do you use two emails ? I received two request from different emails , so I was puzzled a little . Tell me how do you like my work

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GeoKorf In reply to Jet948 [2018-01-04 07:12:50 +0000 UTC]

georgekorf was right, i am still analyzing it, can you give it more little time!

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Jet948 In reply to GeoKorf [2018-01-04 19:34:23 +0000 UTC]

I am happy that you liked it .  Please , after analizing tell me what are pros and cons of my work . Sorry , that I was so silent but 2017 whole year autumn beated me out of tracks

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